a nap
calm washes around me
through every pore
breath is slowing
eyes are closing
stress gone in the past
summer upon us
worry is vanishing
dreams are evolving
wind tickles my face
hair dancing gently
sun is shining
bees are buzzing
warm, open sky above
soft cool grass below
lazily i give in
to sleep
I loved how you personified the hair by saying it was "dancing gently." This provides a better description of what the hair looks like than just saying it was moving.I also liked the imagery you used to create the peaceful setting; words such as "shining," and "open" helped me to picture your surroundings.
ReplyDeleteThis poem makes me long for summer even more than I already have been. The imagery in this poem is wonderful, and I can really picture the scene portrayed. Also by speaking about the warmth of the sun, the senses were appealed to and I could imagin being there. I am going to take a nice nap just like this one right when summer starts.
ReplyDeleteI really like this poem. I love how you used imagery to describe the nap. By using words like "warm, open sky" and "soft, cool grass" I can picture the setting perfectly and it makes me feel like I am actually there. I also like how you personified the wind by saying it tickles your face. It helped me relate more to the poem and it also helped set the tone of the poem.
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